Saturday, June 02, 2007

Teachable Moment

Photo from The Daily Telegraph

As a writer I just couldn't let this one go!! I am sure it is not Hillary's fault - but she should have been the final eyes on this one!! The worst part - she was telling folks that she was a "high tech" candidate!! Spellcheck anyone?

It made me think about the difference between revision and editing/proofreading - one that many of our kids miss and sometimes causes a problem on the editing passages of our NYS Assessments. Here's what the Hillary camp should have done for each:

Revision:Finding the final version by changing words, sentence structure, etc.

Technology: Our Future
Technology Jobs: Our Future
New Techonology: New Tommorrow
New Jobs for Tommorrow

Editing: Reviewing for publication - checking spelling, grammar, punctuation, etc.

New Jobs for Tommorrow

New Jobs for Tomorrow!!

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